All writers have them – those prose tics they exhibit when the going is either too fast, or too slow, for them to notice the word-by-word; those all-too-easy-to-fall-back-on scenes and tropes that can take the place of carefully-crafted or character-driven plotting*; those personal or political agendas that will take advantage of an unguarded moment to turn sneaky fictional persuasion into open polemic.
One of my own sins is a horror of being too obvious about things. Taken too far – as will happen, sometimes, despite all efforts to the contrary – this results in a story that lacks clarity because a lot of the necessary connective bits only exist inside my head.
So I’ve had to make a rule for myself: When in doubt, spell it out.
It’s a useful rule, at least if you’re me, or if that particular writerly sin is one of yours, as well.
Generally speaking, I find that if I have to ask myself, “Self, are you perhaps being a bit over-subtle right here?” the answer is usually, “Yes.”
Also – as I tell myself from time to time – don’t worry about being too obvious. It’s actually fairly hard to be too obvious, and if you are being too obvious, trust me, your editor or your beta readers will let you know.
(And if you’re Vladimir Nabokov or James Joyce or Gene Wolfe, then you’re playing a different game altogether and a different set of general rules apply. Also, you’re probably well beyond needing advice from me on anything, though possibly a good recipe or two might still be useful.)
*Not that “carefully-crafted” and “character-driven” should be taken as mutually exclusive!